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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 8, 2006 17:45:41 GMT -5
Boneclan (where bad cats go when they die) cats were serving their leader. An enormous jet black she-cat with emerald eyes, very long silvery claws, really long pearly white teeth, blood red tongue, powerful rippling muscles, lean thin body, tall legs, and silvery whiskers. This she-cat was named Saberclaw and she rules BoneClan. Her daughter, Treachery, the she-cat that's an exact copy of Saberclaw only smaller and the absence of the blood red tongue, is BoneClan's deputy. Saberclaw rested proudly on a carpet of road kill animals. The BoneClan cats were bringing fresh-kill to Saberclaw. A sleek gray tabby tom looked at a big dark brown tabby tom with big eyes. "Oh Tigerstar, how I wish I've been good! BoneClan is no place for a cat! It's like living in a desert!" The gray tabby meowed. "It IS a desert Darkstripe! Can't you tell from all this sand?" Tigerstar snapped. "Every day, Saberclaw tortures us both mentally and psysically!" Darstripe whimpered. Jest then, a long haired tabby tom walked towards them. "What are you two yammering on about?" The long haired tabby growled. "We were talking about how harsh this place is Brokentail!" Darkstripe wailed. Another tom, a black and white one, approached. "What is it Bone?" Brokentail asked. "We need to serve Saberclaw." Bone replied. "But we got DONE serving!" Tigerstar complained. "Yeah, Saberclaw is such a wicked cat that she make us look like angels!" Brokentail spat. "What are you all saying about my daughter?" A small black tom with a white paw snarled threatenly as he approached. "But Scourge, your daughter IS wicked!" Darkstripe gasped. "My little Saberclaw is the best cat ever and you flea bags know it!" Scourge spat. "Yeah! Don't say anything bad about her!" Tigerstar spat."Oh boy, here he goes agian." Brokentail meowed as he rolled his eyes. "What?" Tigerstar asked. "Come on Tigerstar, every cat in BoneClan knows your in love with her!" Bone sneered. "I can't help it! She's the best! Sadly, she loves another. Some big dark gray tabby named Spear!" Tigerstar mourned. "Sorry to break all this up, but shouldn't we visit Brambleclaw and Hawkfrost and convince them to take over the forest on earth?" Brokentail replied quickly. "We all know that Hawkfrost agreed, we just need to convince Brambleclaw." Bone meowed. "What are you heaps of skunk dung talking about?" A voice exploded across the desert. "Saberclaw!" Darkstripe gasped in terror. Tigerstar's ears perked up and he smiled. "We were talking about how Brambleclaw and Hawkfrost shoud rule the forest on earth Saberclaw." Brokentail replied quickly. "Those two huh? I've been watching them." Saberclaw meowed. "Will you help us convince Brambleclaw into ruling that forest my mistress?" Bone asked? "Why should I care! They're not of my kin!" Saberclaw spat. "Yeah! Why should she?" A voice rang. The voice belonged to Treachery. "But you and Treachery were DarkClan's leaders! You should understand!" Brokentail meowed. "Please?" Tigerstar pleaded. "Go away now or I'll injure you painfully!" Saberclaw snarled. "Daughter, there's no need to be hostile. You should help us convince Brambleclaw into ruling his forest. I mean think about it. He can be your apprentice. Him and Hawkfrost. No cat but you shall mentor them. Even you got to admite that it would be great. So, what do you think?" Scourge meowed. "Apprentices to call my own huh? Suddenly you guys sparked my intrest." Saberclaw meowed slyly. "Like I've said, Hawkfrost agrees on ruling. It's just Brambleclaw we need to convince." Bone meowed. "Don't worry. I've got a trick or two up my paw. I WILL convince Brambledung into ruling weather he like it or not!!!" Saberclaw yowled. All of the eight cats laughed meniacally.
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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 8, 2006 17:53:41 GMT -5
Like I've said, you all can help me write the story, but you have to play by my rules. Saberclaw and her gang will visit Brambleclaw. Saberclaw will torture Brambleclaw both mentally and psysically. Hawkfrost is the nondead bad guy. Hawkfrost is wicked. Hawkfrost will try to force Brambleclaw into joining him. Like they've said, Hawkfrost will kill Dustpelt. Midnight dies. Squirrelflight shall murder Hawkfrost. Saberclaw and her gang and Hawkfrost try to get revenge on Squirrelflight, but Brambleclaw and Ashfur protect her. Ashfur will die (I'll write his death scene). Squirrelflight and Brambleclaw will have kits in the end of the story.
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Post by Jayfeather on Sept 8, 2006 22:13:08 GMT -5
what do u hav against hawkfrost? u really seem 2 hate him
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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 9, 2006 9:08:36 GMT -5
I'll tell you why I hate Hawkfrost my dear Jaypaw.
1. In Moonrise, he wanted to rule all clans. 2. He's ambitious. 3. He's a liar. 4. He seems annoyed with my precious Squirrelflight. 5. In Starlight, he tryed to control the clans by making RiverClan to live on the island. 6. In Starlight, he aided Mudclaw. 7. In Starlight, he was willing to betray RiverClan by being Mudclaw's deputy. 8. I bet he was the one that killed Mudclaw. 9. He vainly thought that Graystripe was dead. 10. He is using Brambleclaw. 11. In Twilight, he told Tigerstar that he was willing to fallow his pawsteps. 12. In Sunset, he kills Dustpelt. 13. On the Sunset cover, he has an evil look on his face.
Now, do you understand why I hate Hawkfrost? What does btw mean? FYI, Squirrelflight is getting better with her cockiness and her arrogantness. Why hate Squirrelflight? She's the daughter of Firestar! If you don't want to help me write the story Jaypaw, then don't.
Everyone else, have fun writing this story!
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Post by wolfclaw on Sept 9, 2006 10:16:08 GMT -5
i guess everyone has their opinion....i myself hate how Onestar got cocky because he used to be friends with Firestar. btw means by the way
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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 9, 2006 11:11:09 GMT -5
Would you like to help me write the story Wolfclaw?
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Post by wolfclaw on Sept 9, 2006 11:19:03 GMT -5
i would if i had the time...i have a poster i need to make.
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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 9, 2006 13:13:20 GMT -5
Thanks Wolfclaw! *hugs Wolfclaw*
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Post by Jayfeather on Sept 9, 2006 13:40:23 GMT -5
srry like i said in many posts im srryi lost my head btw i just luff HAwkfrost because he is evil i luff all the evil characters including Scourge, Tigerstar, (i named my kitty Tigerclaw cuz he's not 2 nice and has the same markings), and lots of others but im srry i cant help with the story unless u read mine and comment it! then i will help
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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 9, 2006 14:42:50 GMT -5
Where's your story at?
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Post by wolfclaw on Sept 9, 2006 15:21:53 GMT -5
yay! that's hug number....a thousand or so? anyways, that's creative that there's a StarClan and a BoneClan. it reminds me of heaven and...i'm not supposed to say the other one....
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Post by wolfclaw on Sept 9, 2006 15:30:26 GMT -5
In the ThunderClan camp, Brambleclaw was eating a mouse he chose out of the fresh kill pile. It was nighttime. All the other cats were asleep, and he was the only one awake. Since his rivallary with Squirrelflight made him so stressed, he decided to calm himself down and stay up for a night.
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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 9, 2006 15:57:32 GMT -5
Squirrelflight was having problems sleeping. She loves Brambleclaw, and yet, she loves Ashfur. Troubled, Squirrelflight got up and drank from the pond.
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Post by wolfclaw on Sept 9, 2006 16:14:45 GMT -5
Brambleclaw's ears pricked up. He thought he heard something. He turned, and followed the source of the sound. He was surprised to see Squirrelflight at the pond.
"Squirrelflight!" he mewed quietly. "What are you doing?"
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Post by Saberclaw on Sept 9, 2006 16:28:41 GMT -5
"What does it look like?" Squirrelflight meowed. "You couldn't sleep?" Brambleclaw asked. Squirrelflight shook her head. "Look, I'm sorry for everything!" Brambleclaw meowed. Squirrelflight's ears perked up. "You are?" Squirrelflight asked. "I am. Look, I know that we have our diffrences, but can we be mates agian? I'm losing sleep over you! Please! Will you forgive me?" Brambleclaw pleaded. Squirrelflight took a drink and gulped down the water. "Oh I suppose I forgive you Brambleclaw. But, I'm sorry. I love you, but I love Ashfur too. What am I supposed to do?" Squirrelflight meowed.
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